The Guilty Son #100WCGU

“He meant nothing untoward!” she shouted.

Kyle was the fifth of Mrs Jamieson’s brood of seven to get into trouble with the police.  Like his older brothers, he had caused panic at the football match by brandishing his knife.  This sent a ripple through the crowd and before it could be controlled, full scale pandemonium had taken over.

The learnèd judge looked over his half-moon glasses at the disturbance in the gallery and spoke in his soft Scottish lilt.

“The scene described today is evocative of Hillsborough, Mrs Jamieson. Does that mean anything to you?”

The woman sat down, knowing she had failed her children.

This post is part of the 100 Word Challenge for Grown-Ups at The Head’s Office.

Photo credit: bensutherland

12 Replies to “The Guilty Son #100WCGU”

  1. Excellent story on spectator violence and the inability or helplessness of some parents. Great read. 🙂

  2. I like the description of the judge. You are very good at creating characters through the little details!

  3. Excellent. I love the many ways words can be used to create completely different stories. This one is very descriptive. Bravo!

  4. Great story, I to like your description of the judge.

  5. Full of suspense – makes me want to know more about the Jamieson family (Mrs Jamieson in particular.) The simplicity and hopelessness of the final sentence sums up the tone of the piece. I really enjoyed reading this.

  6. I would like to read more about the rest of the brood and to hear the mother’s story. Really liked the description of the judge. The reference to Hillborough is chilling . . .

  7. Ok now I have to rethink the words and their meanings 🙂 Nice story!

  8. Excellent Simon! All the words used correctly & in such a way to build the sadness of the piece. Brill!

  9. This is brilliant!. It’s so realistic and the ending makes you feel frustrated with the mother but sad at the same time.

  10. I like how this communicates so much, and how you used these words with your subject. It made me want to know more about that mass panic at the game, and whether her boys were going to learn anything from it.

  11. I love the way you reference real events in both your pieces. It really adds to the emotions that your words evoke.

  12. Being from the other side of the pond, I am not aware of the real events, but this story in so few words is chillingly real. Thank you for the great read!

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